I think the intro was the most pleasant part of the whole video. The audio was abominable - if you intend to make videos and hit it off, invest in a proper microphone, using the one supplied with your headset is a joke. You uploaded in 720p which is fine, but your framerate stuttered - what kind of software were you using to capture the imagery btw.? The worst moment of the whole clip, however, is the abrupt ending at 3:00, which, I'm guessing, is due to the fact that you're using a trial version of the editing software (I'd simply recommend using Windows Movie Maker, it's easy and free, provided that your OS was made by Microsoft).
PS. For a 20-year old born and living in the UK, your spelling and grammar is appalling. I think you ought to lay off video games for a while and work on improving them
