http://www.reverbnation.com/djnabnab
there you can find my two unfinished projekts.
Some sort of feedback and ideas on how to improve my music would be nice!

Note:
Added test 2 wich is a better version of the melodie in test 1. (atleast i think so )

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02:47 <@NabNab> saifon: you so sexy
02:47 <+saifon> D:

http://www.mp3.com.au/

http://www.reverbnation.com/

That's two sites some of my musician friends post their tunes...

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War does not determine who is right - only who is left. - Bertrand Russell

I was thinking, wether I should be going to bed or keep listening to the rambling on mumble

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Da boyz need themselves a Nob they do

well considering your choice of music here, I think you should speed it up a little, sounds kind of boring at the moment

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[SpA]Revenge "Wheres the element of surpise :/"

[SpA]Mint "IN.... MY....PANTS"

[SpA]Minimoose "Revenge is going to jump out of your pants?"

Are you talking about the longer over one minute song or of the small melody i whipped up yesterday?

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02:47 <@NabNab> saifon: you so sexy
02:47 <+saifon> D:

Did I just hear Fruity Loops?
Nice work tho, using FL recently to do some riffs on my midikeyboard

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<@[SpA]DonDonDon> someones gotta love me, and that someone is me

I was more thinking of the beat,
it's my personal opinion, but I like it better when the beat is a bit more speeded up, else it'll get boring and I'll change song xD

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[SpA]Revenge "Wheres the element of surpise :/"

[SpA]Mint "IN.... MY....PANTS"

[SpA]Minimoose "Revenge is going to jump out of your pants?"

I'll be brutally honest with you - the songs are good for starters BUT you have a long way to go. The first tune sounds like some background music from Modern Talking (!) and hardly qualifies without e.g. vocals.
Both songs are FAR too simple to be enjoyable on their own - and they don't have any strong musical punchlines (like e.g. some hardcore techno tracks) to make up for that either.

I'm not saying that you won't get better but this just goes to show how difficult it is to compose a good song - you need to improve the depth of sound by adding additional tracks to your composition if you want to keep up the tempo and the style.

I hope you'll find my criticism constructive - keep it up and compose/post some tunes - eventually you'll get there. ^^
I'm not trying to deter you from composing songs - it's meant as an encouragement to get better.
I know that I didn't - I've been playing around with FL Studio for a long, long time (on and off) but never got to anything I'd deem "shareable". ;-)

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War does not determine who is right - only who is left. - Bertrand Russell

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SaintK: I'm completely lost

I'm not even joking here - the first time I heard this song "Brother Louie" immediately sprang to my mind. :-P

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War does not determine who is right - only who is left. - Bertrand Russell

Well I think the unfinished projekt 1 has some potential. You definitely should work on that one.
Oh guys, please don't mention words like Modern Talking...

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Ze Ãœbermensch

~ Your my heart! You're my soul! ~ ;-)

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War does not determine who is right - only who is left. - Bertrand Russell

Take this!



I'd never believe that I ever will post such a video link, but for bashing migu I'll do it!

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SaintK: I'm completely lost

The sadest part is I even bothered to watch the beginning of it...
But it's so funny!

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Ze Ãœbermensch

Thanks for the feedback. Yes I know that that theres a long way to go but why not reach for the stars while i still can.
Now I'm working on a dark ambient projekt for a short film that im making in my school. It shows the world from a persons eyes who has skitsofrenia (i don't know how thats spelled in english). I got my friend to make some nice depressing and hevy guitar riffs for it.

It'd be nice if anyone has any nice and depressing chaotic dark ambient music that i could use as a refference.

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02:47 <@NabNab> saifon: you so sexy
02:47 <+saifon> D:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8kCzCXi0mpo

They have a song callde you're my grind you're my core too, but I can't find it